Thursday, 31 May 2012

think this is my first failure during a time slip





wrote and uploaded on various sites this  time slip poem  ok as it is  a walk in woodland  and a sudden time slip between prehistoric woodland dwellers and  the present  dirty park  http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/time-slip-2/   not had that many readers or comments as usual
feel it is a failure  of language and image
 best lines i think is  are

Damp plastic hung skinny from ash tree
Lightning forked on something like an oak
Stump raised in flight and fungus lime



rather than the   one million years BC captain caveman  vision  of
same place
different time
or is it the other ?

brute skin fury hungry in a good carnage
bone arrow bowmen
eyes open to their gods

feather and bird skin
long ivory crushed from freshly killed beast a thousand hours ago



diificult to  be emotive  over  a time slip
 never had that experience not even  a deja  vu ! and despite being in hospital intensive care and very ill years ago never had the light at the end of the tunnel  or out of body experience   most timeslips are seeing a wonderful cottage or great  Georgian   house  which when seen again  is a ruin of centuries


putting finishing touches to my jubilee poem  for 4th and 5th June the sun has now given over to rain for the day





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