wrote and uploaded on various sites this time slip poem ok as it is a walk in woodland and a sudden time slip between prehistoric woodland dwellers and the present dirty park http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/time-slip-2/ not had that many readers or comments as usual
feel it is a failure of language and image
best lines i think is are
Damp plastic hung skinny from ash tree
Lightning forked on something like an oak
Stump raised in flight and fungus lime
rather than the one million years BC captain caveman vision of
same place
different time
or is it the other ?
brute skin fury hungry in a good carnage
bone arrow bowmen
eyes open to their gods
feather and bird skin
long ivory crushed from freshly killed beast a thousand hours ago
diificult to be emotive over a time slip
never had that experience not even a deja vu ! and despite being in hospital intensive care and very ill years ago never had the light at the end of the tunnel or out of body experience most timeslips are seeing a wonderful cottage or great Georgian house which when seen again is a ruin of centuries
putting finishing touches to my jubilee poem for 4th and 5th June the sun has now given over to rain for the day
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